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Post by 17dragonboy Fri May 11, 2012 11:13 pm

This is a short Monster Hunter fan fiction story of mine.
It's sort of a spiritual successor to "Delicate Procedure," which... Is no longer online, due to the hosting website going down.
It follows the same Wyverian from "Bad Neighbors," though I think it's a little less comedic.
The whole story will take place over multiple chapters, though I'm not sure of how many. Probably not too many four chapters, altogether about 6,700 words.

This chapter is about 1,300 words. I don't remember exactly how many hours I spent, but at least three.

Enjoy. Hope you'll comment. Constructive criticism is appreciated, as well as any spelling or grammar errors.


Chapter I -- Big Fish in the Small Pond

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Post by Guest Fri May 11, 2012 11:27 pm

I enjoyed it very much. You did a really good job. I look forward to the next chapter to see what happens next.

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Post by Blaster427 Sat May 12, 2012 10:00 am

That was really good! I'm interested to see how he gets back with the egg :-P
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Post by 17dragonboy Tue May 15, 2012 10:49 pm

With this chapter's title, I saw fit to change the previous chapter's title.
This chapter is shy of 1,500 words.
As always, I hope you'll comment, constructive criticism and the like is appreciated.

Chapter II -- Always a Bigger Fish


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Post by 17dragonboy Wed May 16, 2012 9:50 pm

This chapter's shy of 1,200 words.

Chapter III -- Karma's a Bitch

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Post by Guest Thu May 17, 2012 7:25 am

This is a very enjoyable read. You are doing a really good job making the reader feel as if they are in the story . I look forward to the next chapter to see how things work out for the Wyverian.

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Post by Trey Thu May 17, 2012 8:52 am

I loved it Db ol sport, kept me alive after my AP exams lol I need more of this!
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Post by 17dragonboy Fri May 18, 2012 11:15 pm

This chapter's shy of 2,700 works. A bit larger than the previous chapters, but I think that's good for the finale.
I started to experience some writer's block part way through, but managed to get by.

As always, hope you'll comment. Constructive criticism (or support?) would be grand.

Chapter IV (Final) -- Crashing the Party

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Post by Guest Sat May 19, 2012 5:32 am

Fantastic! A perfect conclusion. It was exciting to read and had you sitting on the edge of your seat in anticipation.

Thank you for the very enjoyable story.

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Post by AngelReaper93 Tue Aug 14, 2012 7:37 am

Not bad. Not bad at all! I haven't read one of your works since the original site went down. This was very refreshing to read. I didn't catch any grammatical/spelling mistakes (or at least not enough of them to notice) and your style seems to have stayed solid. But I have a question.

What inspired you to write a story involving Shakalaka? I remember you doing Sakujo's (spelling?) Shop, which centered around a Lynian as well. Speaking of which, do you still have that story somewhere on your hard drive? I'd love to read it again!

I'll most likely be uploading some of my work on here as well. Not sure if anyone will read it, but what's the harm in contributing to the community, right? Great story, man. Hope you'll keep writing more :).
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Post by 17dragonboy Tue Aug 14, 2012 4:33 pm

I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for reading. :-)
This might interest you, as it is somewhat connected to this story.
I'm hoping/expecting to turn out something new in the near future.

You can count on me to read what you write.
While you're waiting for the 7 day waiting period to finish, you might start posting on Minegarde (unless they've got the same thing).

I replied to your email, which has Sakujo's Shop attached (and other stuff). You got the correct spelling, by the way.

As for the Shakalaka, I actually sort of forget what I was thinking at the time. I want to say I thought of them just as I wrote that part.
I suppose it was because they're something different than usual. I had thought of using a large monster (the Rathian), or Melynx.
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Post by AngelReaper93 Tue Aug 14, 2012 9:55 pm

Ah, I see. So the Shakalaka thing was just a refreshing idea? Makes sense.

I'll probably go post those new stories on Minegarde as you've recommended, but I honestly don't like that community very much. Not since the day I visited the admins to have one of my accounts removed. They trolled me like 12 year olds -_-.

Anyway, yeah I'll ride out the 7 day thing and I hope it doesn't apply on Minegarde. You know I'm always reading and reviewing!
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